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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Although some people think too much information is on the Internet, I think this is more of an advantage than a disadvantage. There are two main reasons I believe this: convenience and equality. This essay will discuss in more detail below why the Internet is useful and helpful to realize a more equal world.
First of all, the Internet can make life easier and more convenient. For example, you can ask a question online. If you put up a question on a chat board, someone will tell you the answer soon. Moreover, you can ask questions online and use your account name, you do not have to give your real name. For instance, you can ask private questions like what college you should go to or how to best lose your weight without letting others know who you are. Thus, the Internet allows people to express their true feelings, by making it possible to ask questions and receive answers in a convenient, confidential way. In addition, a lot of reviews on the websites allow you to buy a product after checking how other customers find it. Therefore, you can get the correct information much more quickly today than when you had only a phone or a radio.
Second, thanks to the Internet, people are becoming more equal. The gap between the educational opportunities available to the rich and the poor is becoming smaller. The Internet makes educational costs cheaper. Many online courses are being offered by famous universities at reasonable prices and everyone can listen to the lecturers and even get a further support if they need it. There are also a lot of free materials available to help you study on the Internet. Unlike in earlier times, if you do not have enough money to study abroad or cannot leave your hometown, it is now possible for you to take a course online from a university. You can get an education using the Internet without actually being at the school. Actually, one of my friends has been taking the free-online lessons from an American university to learn English and access to the latest biological research. There is a chance to get a job in an international company if you are able to get good marks on your online courses. Global companies pay attention to the rankings of successful students because they want to hire gifted employees. As you can see, the Internet is opening up and equalizing the chance to get a higher education which many could never dream of having before.
For the reasons of convenience and equality, I think the Internet will have a positive influence on our lives. Life is certainly much more convenient since the arrival of the Internet as we can ask questions, get answers and express our true feeling in a confidential way. At the same time, the Internet is helping to make the world a more equal place as many now have the chance to get a higher education they could not get before.
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Although some people think too much information is on the Internet, I think this is more of an advantage than a disadvantage. There are two main reasons I believe this: convenience and equality. This essay will discuss in more detail below why the Internet is useful and helpful [how it is helping] to realize [create] a more equal world.
First of all, the Internet can make life easier and more convenient. For example, [if] you can ask [put] a question online. If you put up a question on a chat board, someone will tell you the answer soon. Moreover, [when] you can ask questions online [, you can] and use your account name, [and] you do not have to give [keep] your real name [private]. For instance, you can [It is possible to] ask private [personal] questions like what college you should go to or how to best lose your weight, without letting others know who you are. [In addition, reviews on websites allow you to buy a product after checking how other customers find it.] Thus, the Internet allows people to express their true feelings, by making it possible to ask questions and receive answers in a convenient, confidential [way, as well as to] way. In addition, a lot of reviews on the websites allow you to buy a product after checking how other customers find it. Therefore, you can get the correct [useful] information much more quickly today than when you had only a phone or a radio [were available].
Second, thanks to the Internet, people are becoming more equal [because educational costs are cheaper]. The gap between the educational opportunities available to the rich and the poor is becoming smaller [in this way]. The [poor have access to] Internet makes educational costs cheaper. Many online courses are being offered [at reasonable prices]. [Even] by famous universities [have courses] at reasonable prices and everyone can listen to the lecturers and even get[offer] further support if they need it. [it is needed]. There are also a lot of free [Free study] materials [are also] available to help you study on the Internet. Unlike in earlier times, if you do not have enough money to study abroad or cannot leave your hometown, it is now possible for you to take a course online from a university. Y[y]ou can get an education using the Internet without actually being at the school [from your home]. Actually, one of my friends has been taking the free-online [English] lessons from an American university to learn English and [uses the Internet to] access to the latest biological research. There is [also] a chance to get a job [as] in an international company if you are able to get good marks on your online courses. Global companies pay attention to the rankings of successful students because they want to hire gifted employees. As you can see, the Internet is opening up [access to education, information and opportunity] and equalizing the chance to get a higher education which many could never dream of having before.
For the reasons of convenience and equality, I think the Internet will have a positive influence on our lives. [To summarize,] L[l]ife is certainly much more convenient since the arrival of the Internet as we can ask questions, get answers and express our true feeling in a confidential way. At the same time, the Internet is helping to make the world a more equal place[, not only for] as many now have the chance to get a higher education[, but in the equal access to information and opportunity which] they could [was] not [possible before its appearance] get before.